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#81
11-11-2014, 04:11 PM
wahh Adil bhai... nice radeef today...

aur wahh! khoob ashaar aaye haiN "yaad" per... Thumbs Up

chaleN meri taraf sy bhi aik koshish :-

hum kyuN kareN faryaad??
jab us ne nahi kiya yaad...
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kia kaheN kuch kaha nahii jaata!
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#82
11-11-2014, 04:17 PM
saari raat jaagaati hai ..
bin bulaye teri yaad..
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kia kaheN kuch kaha nahii jaata!
aah...! chup bhii raha nahii jaata.. (Mir Taqi Mir)

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#83
11-11-2014, 04:20 PM
Hai mujhpe karz ye tera, teri badaulat hoon,
Mere har marz ki dawa hai bas teri hee yaad..
(SR) c
Shayaraana andaaz hai tera,
Mujhsey mohabbat karney ka...
Har lafz mein intazaam hai,
Mere tabhiyat sey marney ka....
(SR) c
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#84
11-11-2014, 04:20 PM
waaaahhh Hassanbhai,
kya baat hai... aate hi ek se baDHkar ek aashaar pesh kar diye Smile

likhte rahiye.....
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#85
11-11-2014, 04:50 PM
(11-11-2014, 04:20 PM)Shayaraina Wrote: Hai mujhpe karz ye tera, teri badaulat hoon,
Mere har marz ki dawa hai bas teri hee yaad..
(SR) c

waaaaaaaaaaahhhh!! kya baat hai, Sanjayji.... yaad.. marz kii davaa, waah bahot khub khayaal......... Smile

hamaari jaanibse ek aur sher...

ab tak maiN munaafii* meN jo bhii baat bhulaa thaa
wo muttafiq-e-ishq** meN aaii'n haiN sabhii yaad
*denial
** agreeing in love
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#86
11-11-2014, 05:25 PM
(11-11-2014, 04:20 PM)aadeil Wrote: waaaahhh Hassanbhai,
kya baat hai... aate hi ek se baDHkar ek aashaar pesh kar diye Smile

likhte rahiye.....

behad shukriyaa Adil bhai... aap ka saath raha to koshish jaari rahe gii.. insha Allah .. Smile

aik aur koshish :-

aise aap haqeeqat meiN bhi ru-ba-ru hooN!
jese apni marzi se aati hai aap ki yaad....
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kia kaheN kuch kaha nahii jaata!
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#87
11-11-2014, 05:29 PM
Kya baat hai....ek sher ye dekhen...

Humko ussi ke ishq ne maayus kar diya !
Khwabon me jo basa tha bankar sunahri yaad !!
Tumhaare liye to dhadakta tha ye dil .....
Tumhi ban gaye in dhadkanon ke dushman .......
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#88
11-11-2014, 05:30 PM
(11-11-2014, 04:50 PM)aadeil Wrote: waaaaaaaaaaahhhh!! kya baat hai, Sanjayji.... yaad.. marz kii davaa, waah bahot khub khayaal......... Smile

hamaari jaanibse ek aur sher...

ab tak maiN munaafii* meN jo bhii baat bhulaa thaa
wo muttafiq-e-ishq** meN aaii'n haiN sabhii yaad
*denial
** agreeing in love

wahhh! waaah! .... bohat bohat khoob..... kamaal hai Adil bhai.. Thumbs Up
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#89
11-11-2014, 05:32 PM
(11-11-2014, 05:29 PM)Pankaj Mishra Wrote: Kya baat hai....ek sher ye dekhen...

Humko ussi ke ishq ne maayus kar diya !
Khwabon me jo basa tha bankar sunahri yaad !!

wahhhhhhhhhhhh! Pankaj bhai... bohat bohat khoobsorat Thumbs Up
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#90
11-11-2014, 05:42 PM
Waaah Aadeil bhai waaah..and thanks so much..

Saath bhi rehna hamesha, hai ajab mushkil,
Doe kadam hatt-tee toe , aaey tumhari yaad..(SR)c

(11-11-2014, 04:50 PM)aadeil Wrote: waaaaaaaaaaahhhh!! kya baat hai, Sanjayji.... yaad.. marz kii davaa, waah bahot khub khayaal......... Smile

hamaari jaanibse ek aur sher...

ab tak maiN munaafii* meN jo bhii baat bhulaa thaa
wo muttafiq-e-ishq** meN aaii'n haiN sabhii yaad
*denial
** agreeing in love
Shayaraana andaaz hai tera,
Mujhsey mohabbat karney ka...
Har lafz mein intazaam hai,
Mere tabhiyat sey marney ka....
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#91
11-11-2014, 08:14 PM
bohat khoob doston...Thumbs Up

muddat huii ik haadasa-e-ishq ko lekin
ab tak hai tere dil ke dhadakne ki sada yaad

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#92
11-11-2014, 08:21 PM
sabhii arbaab ne kyaa khub mehfil sajaa rakkhi hai.. Waah
ek se ek laajavaab ashaar se mehfil ko sajaaye rakkhaa hai. ? Smile
maiN sabhii ka shukriyaa adaa kartaa hooN Smile
aur sabhii ko dheroN daad o mubaarakbaad Smile

aur ek koshish meri aur se...
dil jalte rahaa KHaak-nashiN hotii rahii yaad
phir aag sa'mbhalte hi terii aane lagii yaad
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#93
11-11-2014, 08:45 PM
Har taraf bardaad hai qayanat mein aashiq,
Idhar kisiki yaad, udhar kisiki yaad.
(SR) c
Shayaraana andaaz hai tera,
Mujhsey mohabbat karney ka...
Har lafz mein intazaam hai,
Mere tabhiyat sey marney ka....
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#94
11-11-2014, 08:58 PM
Thanks Aadeil bhai.
(11-11-2014, 05:42 PM)Shayaraina Wrote: Waaah Aadeil bhai waaah..and thanks so much..

Saath bhi rehna hamesha,  hai ajab mushkil,
Doe kadam hatt-tee toe , aaey tumhari yaad..(SR)c
Shayaraana andaaz hai tera,
Mujhsey mohabbat karney ka...
Har lafz mein intazaam hai,
Mere tabhiyat sey marney ka....
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#95
12-11-2014, 09:26 AM
(11-11-2014, 08:14 PM)zainy Wrote: bohat khoob doston...Thumbs Up

muddat huii ik haadasa-e-ishq ko lekin
ab tak hai tere dil ke dhadakne ki sada yaad

jigar muradabadi

(11-11-2014, 08:45 PM)Shayaraina Wrote: Har taraf bardaad hai qayanat mein aashiq,
Idhar kisiki yaad, udhar kisiki yaad.
(SR) c

(11-11-2014, 08:58 PM)Shayaraina Wrote: Thanks Aadeil bhai.

waah! kya khubsurat ashaar se navaazaa hai mehfil ko Smile
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#96
12-11-2014, 09:30 AM
tum se raah-o-rasm baDHaa kar divaane kehlaayeN kyuN
jin galiyoN meN patthar barseN un galiyoN meN jaayeN kyuN

-- Kafil Aazar Amrohi
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#97
12-11-2014, 09:41 AM
merii purani diary se ek ghazal ke kuchh ashaar.... Smile is meN ek koshish hum ne kii thii ki ek hi sher meN do kaafiyoN kaa istemaal kiyaa hai... Smile

chehra chhipaana hai to uTHaanaa naqaab kyuN
sharm-o-hayaa hai phir yuN dikhaanaa shabaab kyuN

Karke numaaisheN wo yadee husn-e-jism kee
jalwe dikhaaye khud to zamaanaa kharaab kyuN

paemaane gar wo ginke pilaate haiN aaNKHoN se
shokhee-e-beKHudee pe bahaanaa sharaab kyuN

shikwe jo karte jaate kiseeke naseeb pe
apnee museebatoN pe jataanaa hijaab kyuN

deke tujhe ye dil jo ghareeb ban ke rah gayaa
kehte wo Tute dil ko begaanaa sawaab kyuN
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#98
12-11-2014, 09:51 AM
aur ek meri apnii Ghazal ke kuchh ashaar... Smile

mere saath kal baDHe the wahi haath chhuDaaye phir kyuN
go rahe puraane rishte ye daraaD aaye phir kyuN

tere haath jal rahe haiN jo tu thaam rahaa hai mujhko
hai savaal mere dil ko tu ye aag lagaaye phir kyuN

ye zaraa zaraa se aaNsooN ye zaraa zaraa si muskaan
mere GHum pe ye gumaaN hai wo hue paraaye phir kyuN

hai jo zaKHm aise khaaye ki lahoo bhii beh na paaye
mere ashq sukh gaye haiN koii dil jalaaye phir kyuN

tere pyaar meN jiyaa maiN jo usii se mar rahaa hooN
ye yakiin ab ki gul ke rahe KHaar* saaye phir kyuN
(*thorns)

ye Safiir tere taraane na koii bayaan-e-Ghalib
magar aaj bhii wo GHum hai na ho zaar* haaye** phir kyuN
(*to wail; cry profusely, **along with)
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#99
12-11-2014, 09:58 AM
vaadoN ke jangal meN 'Aazar' hum to barosN bhaTke haiN
aap kareN kyuN dil pe bharosa aap ye dhokaa khaayeN kyuN

-- Kafeel Aazar Amrohi
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#100
12-11-2014, 11:46 AM
(12-11-2014, 09:58 AM)N@zneen Wrote: Bahot khoob dost lagta hai tumhara fav.word hai 'kyuN' Smile do ghazal bhi likha hua hai is radeef par aur MashaAllah bahot khoob likha hai Smile

Sharing bhi umdaa hai usi ghazal se ek sher meri tarafse.....

Haan ham ne bhi aaj kisii ka naazuk sa dil to.Daa hai
shahr-e-vafa kii rasm yahii hai ham is par sharmaae.N kyuN

- Kafil Aazar Amrohi

shukriya Naaz.. Smile vaise fav. kii baat pe toh bas itnaa kahungaa ki us vaqt zehn meN savaalaat honge kisi vajah se ki 'kyuN'? aur ek sher ban gayaa to GHazal ban jaati hai! Smile

aur masha allah! bahot khub sher pesh kiyaa hai.... Smile

lo ek aur.... Smile
gardish-e-mehr-o-maah* bhii gardish-e-jaam** ban gayii
sub'h na ladkhadaae kyuN shaam na jhuum jaaye kyuN

-- Ravish Siddiqi
*movement of sun & moon
**movement of wine goblet
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